The Long and Short of It - Twitter Haiku

I have been exploring twitter, a microblogging tool that allows only 140 characters per entry. I stumbled across a twitter writing contest in haiku, and have been counting syllables on my fingers ever since. Parameters rock - it's great to have two giant walls to work between (or, betweet, as twitterers might say) 140 characters, and a rigid structure.

I need your help! I can only submit one....so what do you think? Deadline is Sunday night (11/16). Please comment here or on facebook, email me, send smoke signals....THANKS!

A haiku refresher....three phrases, broken up this way: 5 syllables / 7 syllables / 5 syllables

For example:

If you think haiku / you'll wake up at four thirty, / counting, like I do

They gave this example, found on twitter:

The furnace is fixed / breath invisible again / how much is the bill?

Here's what I have come up with so far:

Wilson, stop barking! / we're becoming bad neighbors / plus I need my mail

Why can't it be fall? / the calendar says it is / still sweating in shorts

One ring, two, then three / my hovering hand still shy / then only birdsong

Wide awake at five / even the dog rolls over / just leave time alone

I spent so much time / jonesing for community / then found twitterers

Killing mockingbirds / by waiting so long to write / holding fallen leaves

I wrote a haiku / in my head, before sleeping / now it's gone. Ah well.

buttering my toast / grateful for bread and butter / and a job...for now

is anyone else / as obsessed with haiku tweets / as I find myself?

young girl on wee bike/ wet day - her tires slide on leaves / fall, scrapes, tears, tears, tears.

Reading: 19 minutes

Listening to: Nickel Creek

Blooming: Spanish Tarragon